resonant: Martin Freeman has his doubts (Sneaky John (zrayne))resonant ([personal profile] resonant) wrote,
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Entry tags:sga, stories
This was supposed to be a smutlet for [livejournal.com profile] z_rayne, in exchange for making this icon for me, but it got a little out of hand.

Thirst
McKay/Sheppard -- 20K -- NC-17
How many minutes would a mouthful of lukewarm water add to Sheppard's lifespan? What would it feel like?

Beta thanks to [livejournal.com profile] astolat, [livejournal.com profile] cesperanza, and [livejournal.com profile] terrio.

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[identity profile] nestra.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:29 pm UTC (link)
Gah. *fans self* Mercy, mercy.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:45 am UTC (link)
Hee! Thanks.

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[identity profile] maryavatar.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:35 pm UTC (link)
Very nice :)

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:46 am UTC (link)
Glad you liked it!

What a very inspiring icon.

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[identity profile] margueritem.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:38 pm UTC (link)
That was a very nice story.

And that icon... *stares*

*forgets to eat*

*forgets to sleep*

*just stares*

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:47 am UTC (link)
hee -- it's lovely, isn't it?

And glad you liked the story.

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ext_2233: Writing MamaDeb (MamaDeb)


[identity profile] mamadeb.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:40 pm UTC (link)
Oh. Gentle and lyrical and sad and sweet...

So nice.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:48 am UTC (link)
I'm so glad!

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[identity profile] janedavitt.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:45 pm UTC (link)
Great exploration of McKay's frustration and eventual realisation and so hot at the end. Loved it.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:49 am UTC (link)
Aw, thanks! I'm glad.

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[identity profile] swanswan.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 03:46 pm UTC (link)
Exxxcellent. I was just reading along, enjoying the drinking visuals and the Rodney thoughts, until I came to this bit:

He thought it might have been the simple thirst of it. Sheppard always appeared to have some hidden depths of something or other -- it was the sort of thing that fueled much heated speculation; Rodney wasn't deaf -- but it wasn't often that he let anyone see him being selfish. Desperate. Out of control. Hungry.

And, right, that was a person you really wanted to get involved with, someone who refused to need anything. That was a recipe for happiness, yes indeed.

And then I said "ha" really loudly in amazement because that's just it! That's who John is! Or one bit of him, anyway. The self-denial KING! And then there was kissing and Rodney straddling and hands under shirts and I had to press my hands to my cheeks and smile. So good!!

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:50 am UTC (link)
Oh, good -- I was hoping that would ring true for people. I have a hard time getting a handle on John, so I've figured out (or maybe decided) that this is because he doesn't want people to get a handle on him.

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[identity profile] cursive.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:03 pm UTC (link)
"Repetition is not making this conversation any more interesting."

That's a great McKay line.

I really enjoyed this. Thanks.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:51 am UTC (link)
That's why Rodney's so much fun to write. Thanks -- glad you liked it.

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[identity profile] cereta.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:07 pm UTC (link)
Oh, that was lovely and hot.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:52 am UTC (link)
Thanks!

And my, how beautiful your icon is.

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[identity profile] kelliem.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:14 pm UTC (link)
*thud*

Lovely. You have always had the ability to say so much, in so few words.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:53 am UTC (link)
Aww. Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it.

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[identity profile] http://users.livejournal.com/_inbetween_/
2005-10-27 04:15 pm UTC (link)
Thank you. That was just perfect again.
I never tire of need. And release.

Fits my mood-theme even. Image

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:53 am UTC (link)
Oh. Oh wow. That's beautiful.

And glad you liked it!

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ext_1553: (vala)


[identity profile] 01100100.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:17 pm UTC (link)
I loved Sheppard wanting something and denying it and Rodney making the connection, recognizing the thirst - I liked this one a great deal. I also needed a drink of water afterwards, really bad ;-)

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:54 am UTC (link)
You should have seen me guzzling water as I wrote it.

Glad you liked it!

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ext_1637: (Wickedwords)


[identity profile] wickedwords.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:35 pm UTC (link)
Yes, yes, yes. I love how true to both characters this was -- John's keeping things distant and Rodney grabbing them close -- and it made me feel all warm and happy to see them get together in it. I love when Rodney sees past John's BS; that was a beautiful moment for me.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:55 am UTC (link)
Those are the moments I love, too. Glad this was convincing!

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[identity profile] lyra-sena.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 04:36 pm UTC (link)
gahd, hot and wonderful as always.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:55 am UTC (link)
Aww. Thanks!

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copracat: dreamwidth vera (dreamwidth vera)


[personal profile] copracat
2005-10-27 04:59 pm UTC (link)
That was nice in a way that was both tense and sexy.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:56 am UTC (link)
Thanks! I really meant to write a lighthearted romp, but, yeah, the universe just said bwaa-ha-ha to that.

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[identity profile] miss-porcupine.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 05:01 pm UTC (link)
There was definitely something familiar about the look on Sheppard's face. Rodney let his brain puzzle at it while he looked around the corners of the room, more to buy himself some thinking time than because he expected to see anything he hadn't already seen.

And he didn't. But that look of Sheppard's --

The way he'd had been looking at the canteen. That was the way he was looking at Rodney now. Like something he longed for, even needed, but wasn't going to take now, even though -- maybe because -- he was fairly certain it wasn't going to be there tomorrow.

He let his eyes fall on Sheppard again, and now that he was looking for it, it was like a big neon sign. This is John Sheppard looking at something he won't let himself have.
You had me long before this, but... guh. John is an ascetic in the old style, a creature of habit when it comes to denial of gratification. Normally that's noble. Here, with Rodney overcoming it, it's just hot.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:56 am UTC (link)
I'm so glad that worked for you! Thanks.

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ext_1611: Isis statue (statue)


[identity profile] isiscolo.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 05:03 pm UTC (link)
What a beautiful metaphor, and a lovely story draped around it.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:57 am UTC (link)
And your icon is so appropriate!

Glad you liked it.

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[identity profile] hlglne.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 05:22 pm UTC (link)
that is goddam beautiful. I just hope they don't waste the moisture, and do some cleanup.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:58 am UTC (link)
Hee -- I never thought about that part.

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[identity profile] vylit.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 06:12 pm UTC (link)
This is fabulous and sweet, and I really adore your John and Rodney voices.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:58 am UTC (link)
Oh, good -- glad they worked for you!

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[personal profile] spikedluv
2005-10-27 06:46 pm UTC (link)
Wonderful story! Love the image of John looking at Rodney the way he looked at the water, something he desperately wanted, needed, but was denying himself.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:59 am UTC (link)
Thanks! Glad you liked that as much as I did.

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[identity profile] thisisbone.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 06:51 pm UTC (link)
Lovely, Res!

I believed every word. :)

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 01:59 am UTC (link)
Oh, good! Glad you liked it.

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[identity profile] ellen-fremedon.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 07:09 pm UTC (link)
That was lovely, as always.

Now I need a drink of water.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 02:00 am UTC (link)
Yeah, it made me thirsty every time I worked on it. Glad you liked it, though!

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[identity profile] lilysaid.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 07:24 pm UTC (link)
oh my god, that was so good. I was reading very, very slowly because I didn't want it to be over.

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 02:00 am UTC (link)
Wow, that's a beautiful compliment!

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[identity profile] fullygoldy.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 07:36 pm UTC (link)
Yowza!! That was nice.

Thank you!

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 02:01 am UTC (link)
Thanks yourself!

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[identity profile] honkytonkgirl.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 08:33 pm UTC (link)
The thing that got me was this:

There was a swallow or two left in the canteen. Rodney shook it so Sheppard could hear. "Open your mouth."

Sheppard shook his head mutely.

Rodney reached out and rubbed his thumb over Sheppard's lower lip, and any vestige of doubt he might have had vanished at Sheppard's quick inhalation. "Open, John," he said softly.

This small, significant, gesture totally undoes John and I love it. Thank you!

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 02:02 am UTC (link)
The "Open, John" was my favorite line, too, so I'm glad it got to you!

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[identity profile] flaming-muse.livejournal.com
2005-10-27 09:03 pm UTC (link)
Wow, that was fabulous. The voices were excellent, the visuals were amazing, and I think you captured John and Rodney really well. Rodney is not big on self-denial in many ways - he doesn't see the point - and John is so used to denying himself things that he wants. He thinks he has to, even when he doesn't. The dynamic here is so good.

Er, pardon me. I seem to have made a mess. *wipes the squee off of your journal*

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[identity profile] resonant8.livejournal.com
2005-10-28 02:11 am UTC (link)
No, no, squee is the best decoration for an LJ. Glad you liked it.

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