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astolat was writing A Beautiful Lifetime Event, I got to read it in bits and pieces as it was in progress, and then I'd go away and think about it all the next day. And because I'm terribly shallow, what I was thinking about, of course, was what it would be like when Rodney and John finally had sex. And I thought about it until I had a whole scene in my head, and then I wrote it down.
And of course the way she did it was marvelous, perfect, needing no help whatsoever from me -- but if you had the urge to spend a little longer in that universe, you could read mine.
Definitely read hers first, or mine will make no sense. But I didn't really need to tell you that, did I?
A sex scene that didn't happen in A Beautiful Lifetime Event
McKay/Sheppard -- NC-17 -- 20K
astolat was writing A Beautiful Lifetime Event, I got to read it in bits and pieces as it was in progress, and then I'd go away and think about it all the next day. And because I'm terribly shallow, what I was thinking about, of course, was what it would be like when Rodney and John finally had sex. And I thought about it until I had a whole scene in my head, and then I wrote it down. And of course the way she did it was marvelous, perfect, needing no help whatsoever from me -- but if you had the urge to spend a little longer in that universe, you could read mine.
Definitely read hers first, or mine will make no sense. But I didn't really need to tell you that, did I?
A sex scene that didn't happen in A Beautiful Lifetime Event
McKay/Sheppard -- NC-17 -- 20K
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Date: 5/31/05 03:33 am (UTC)Perfect extra moment to that universe, res. Yay!
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Date: 5/31/05 03:46 am (UTC)"...so it's just a question of whether having another guy present would be a deal-breaker, erectionally speaking. For you, I mean."
In general, this was sweet and hot and great. I love that you wrote fanfiction for fanfiction.
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Date: 5/31/05 08:50 pm (UTC)I often finish other people's stories in my head, but this is the first time I ever actually wrote it down. Like I don't have enough of my own stuff to work on...
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Date: 5/31/05 03:49 am (UTC)>His hair had comb tracks in it. It made John's throat hurt.<
Aw. Mine too, a little.
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Date: 5/31/05 08:52 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/05 03:55 am (UTC)Oh dear god. *strangled cry* That kind of detail always kills me. KILLS me.
You know, I feel so inadequate giving feedback on SGA at the moment--and I'm realizing, because I'm writing an offbeat pairing right now--that the feedback of people who don't know the show or characters seems a bit off to me at times. *Welcome*, very welcome, and yet, I'm often wondering, how can they *really* appreciate my nuances (pause for trumpets of ego) if they don't know the show or actors' gestures and voices and so on?
So I'm thinking that maybe my feedback is kind of lame, but I do console myself that I've seen 2-3(ish) episodes and maybe this helps my credibility as a squeer (er, squee-r) just a little.
I blather. I'm going to go finish reading your story now. *g*
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Date: 5/31/05 08:54 pm (UTC)And whatever you may or may not know about the canon, you certainly know from sexy, so I'm taking your feedback very seriously.
because I'm writing an offbeat pairing right now
You're writing it? Really? Wow. [is very very ineffably happy]
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Date: 5/31/05 03:58 am (UTC)Oh my god.
t. That put John in a good spot close to one of Rodney's nipples, and he poked it with his tongue to make it stand up, and then plucked it with his lips, and then sucked it a little, wet and soft-tongued.
Oh my GOD.
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Date: 5/31/05 08:54 pm (UTC)(no subject)
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Date: 5/31/05 04:23 am (UTC)Wow.
I want a corner suite in that universe.
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Date: 5/31/05 04:34 am (UTC)And how insanely much do I love you right now?
But what totally killed me? Rodney with his shirt tucked in and comb tracks in his hair. *wibbles*
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Date: 5/31/05 08:57 pm (UTC)I adore your icon; he's got that "Oh, please," expression on his face that I love so much.
Squee
Date: 5/31/05 04:47 am (UTC)I'm so glad you gave us a glimpse of how it could have been not that I love the orginal sex less but it's always nice to read AU's
Love you both
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Date: 5/31/05 09:00 pm (UTC)It was fun to write a story in a universe where they already love each other and know it!
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Date: 5/31/05 05:29 am (UTC)Oh, god, that was -- He was -- John had made him --
and
"Too much, oh, too late," and he pushed John painfully against the wall and grunted into the side of his face -- coming, god, he was coming -- shit, he was coming and John couldn't see it or taste it or feel it, really, except in the wild pounding of his heart against John's chest and the broken way he was whispering John's name.
"Next time," John whispered fiercely
Oh yeah. Because that's like the *wibble*, only with the *guh*, too. So perfect.
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Date: 5/31/05 10:59 am (UTC)Favourite line: His eyes were soft; some tension was gone now that had been so habitual that John had never noticed it at all.
I could feel myself relax as I read it, any residual tension vanishing!
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Date: 5/31/05 09:03 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/05 11:00 am (UTC)Your ficlet was gorgeous, the icing on the cake to a wonderfully sweet tale. This made me go 'Awwww' - "You don't have to, you don't, if you don't want to," he whispered, "but, oh, John, please, please --"
I think I have another pairing to add to my list of loves :-)
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Date: 5/31/05 09:04 pm (UTC)So glad you liked it!
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Date: 5/31/05 11:53 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/05 09:05 pm (UTC)And, huh, I never thought of this as a pro-saving-it argument, but it totally is.
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Date: 5/31/05 01:46 pm (UTC)"So," John said carefully. "That's worth pursuing, I'd say."
Rodney nodded. "Not a complete waste of time, no."
That. Was perfect. *g*
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Date: 5/31/05 09:06 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/05 02:49 pm (UTC)Rodney nodded. "Not a complete waste of time, no."
*sigh*
Just beautiful.
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Date: 5/31/05 09:06 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/05 03:08 pm (UTC)And I keep swallowing when it hurts John to hear Rodney beg, and I notice I am smiling at their literal pillow-talk, and my heart (or stomach, as I am sure Rodney would agree, it being the more sensitive organ and connected directly to our emotions) is still jumping and hurting when they've already spent themselves three times. I am all shagged out after having read first
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