If you've got two people having sex which is in any way ass-related, and you need one of them to make an exclamation, I would really very much prefer if the exclamation were anything other than "Shit!"
That is the one thing that will immediately knock me out of a sex scene. If it didn't gross me out so much, I would write a sex scene where one character says "shit!" at one of those moments, and the other character stops what he is doing so character number 1 can use the bathroom.
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Date: 7/18/06 03:26 am (UTC)How about "Oh, poop!"
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Date: 7/18/06 03:27 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 7/18/06 03:32 am (UTC)*looks innocent*
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Date: 7/18/06 03:42 am (UTC)*giggles madly*
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Date: 7/26/06 02:21 pm (UTC)"Oops, sorry. Thought I was clean."
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Date: 7/26/06 02:22 pm (UTC)