New HP novel: Transfigurations
Apr. 25th, 2003 11:16 pmI know, I know, it's not Easter Monday. I didn't get as much writing time as I expected during my vacation.
But now, glorying in the knowledge that I completed my HP novel before JKR completed hers (though not by much), I present:
Transfigurations
Harry/Draco -- NC-17 -- 400K
No underage
Five years after Voldemort's defeat, Harry returns to England to help re-open Hogwarts.
Or read one chapter at a time:
1. Homing
2. Ruins
3. Sacrifice
4. Synergy
5. Lessons
6. The Ripple Effect
7. All Souls
8. Greetings
9. Modern History
10. Finding
11. The League of Protection
12. Magic Fatigue
13. Duels
14. Dungeons
15. Memorials
16. Sorting
Epilogue
I can't even begin to list all the people I need to thank here -- you can read about them in the story notes (watch out for spoilers) -- but I owe it all to
julad, who deserves to be showered with chocolate, rose petals, good-looking pureblood wizards, and anything else her heart desires. I also want to give special mention to
darthfox and
cesperanza and
kaneko for beta.
But now, glorying in the knowledge that I completed my HP novel before JKR completed hers (though not by much), I present:
Transfigurations
Harry/Draco -- NC-17 -- 400K
No underage
Five years after Voldemort's defeat, Harry returns to England to help re-open Hogwarts.
Or read one chapter at a time:
1. Homing
2. Ruins
3. Sacrifice
4. Synergy
5. Lessons
6. The Ripple Effect
7. All Souls
8. Greetings
9. Modern History
10. Finding
11. The League of Protection
12. Magic Fatigue
13. Duels
14. Dungeons
15. Memorials
16. Sorting
Epilogue
I can't even begin to list all the people I need to thank here -- you can read about them in the story notes (watch out for spoilers) -- but I owe it all to
Oh, this is marvelous
Date: 4/26/03 03:54 am (UTC)Sigh. Delicious.
~Icarus
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Date: 4/26/03 06:54 am (UTC)"And the title of Headmaster? How is that assigned?" Harry asked.
"By the Sorting Hat, of course," Hermione said. "Have you still not read --"
That's my girl; never change, Hermione! *g*
-Beth
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Date: 4/28/03 01:10 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/26/03 07:21 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 12:41 pm (UTC)It's obvious that great care was taken with the story and it really shows.
Not just by me, either -- I had some truly amazing thinking-and-writing partners on this.
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Date: 4/26/03 07:39 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/26/03 07:42 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 12:42 pm (UTC)and the mines are really, really devious,
Slytherin, ain't they?
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Date: 4/26/03 07:52 am (UTC)first chapter
Date: 4/26/03 08:10 am (UTC)Disney World? The actual Magic Kingdom? I fell out laughing. The opening is sheer brilliance -- the haunted men's room, indeed. Credulous night workers pissing in pairs. Too funny. Your careful scene setting pays off -- I can almost taste the food on Harry's plate. Almost it's enough to make me forgive you for killing Snape off. Gasp. Harry's wonderment at the changes around him is the perfect vehicle for the reader's sense of displacement. Dear God, did Hermione marry Finch-Fletchley? Egad.
I am off to read more. I will ration myself so I don't sit up reading the whole thing today, turning bleary-eyed and headachy at the screen.
Fabula Rasa
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Date: 4/28/03 12:43 pm (UTC)*snicker* Gotten those, too, have you?
Almost it's enough to make me forgive you for killing Snape off. Gasp
I didn't want to do it! Really! The canon made me!
^_^ Awesome story!!
Date: 4/26/03 09:39 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 12:44 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/26/03 09:39 am (UTC)CONGRATULATIONS!
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Date: 4/28/03 12:46 pm (UTC)And I'm more glad than I can say that it isn't as much work to read as it was to write.
:D
Date: 4/26/03 11:27 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 01:12 pm (UTC)Yay!
Date: 4/26/03 06:10 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 12:48 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/27/03 12:37 am (UTC)I also can't believe that I didn't realise why Draco kept calling McGonagall "Kitty" until the ghost cat appeared at the end *smacks her forehead*.
Anyway thanks
Jeddy
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Date: 4/28/03 12:49 pm (UTC)Poor McGonagall. I put her through so many indignities, but being called Kitty has got to be among the worst.
review (contains spoilers)
Date: 4/27/03 01:45 pm (UTC)Firstly, I must commend you on the Harry/Draco dynamic. Their relationship developed in a slow, but credible and controlled way, and the sex scenes were exceptionally well-handled. I adored the offbeat locations, the awkward conversations, and the physical and emotional contortions of the characters in their pursuit (and at some points avoidance) of intimacy.
There was so much to revel in when it came to the characterisations. For instance, Harry's refusal to call Draco anything but "Malfoy" until the very end, while Draco seemed to have extravagant nicknames for everyone except Harry. There was also Draco's varied wardrobe, and Harry's initial irritation and then growing fondness for it. And the way Draco was always stealing food off people's plates, and Harry noticed this every single time - even to the extent of photographing him while he did it.
These elements were all so well integrated into the shifts their relationship underwent (antagonism, understanding, affection, love) during the course of the story. These lines near the end really got me: "Harry spotted him under the portmap with Ron and Phoenix and an empty seat where Hermione must have been, eating fruit from a bowl. He had on that same plum-colored robe he'd worn at the opening feast, and as Harry watched, he met his eyes with the same look -- recognition, attraction, a sort of cautious, well-guarded hope --". It pleased me so much that Harry no longer appeared to mind Draco's affected clothes or annoying eating habits. And, even more importantly, that he had seen behind the facade, and finally grasped what Draco's feelings toward him had been from the start.
I do have one minor reservation, and that was the way you handled Ron. Don't get me wrong, he was in character - rather more laid-back than in canon, but that was a valid approach since he was an adult. I was just surprised at the way he faded from the action after his early comments about Draco's sexuality. Harry worried in passing that Ron would notice his affair, but Ron never actually did so. Ron's reaction to the revelation about Sunday's gender was peculiarly muted. And when the Harry-Draco relationship did go public, we were simply left to assume Ron was one of the people cheering in the background at the party. As Harry's best friend, I think Ron would have been a little more engaged in events as they unfolded. However, I want to stress that this in no way undermined the overall quality of the story. (Let's face it, the prominence or otherwise of Ron is a canon issue. If this was original fiction, rather than fanfiction, I wouldn't even raise it).
So, you'll have gathered by now that I really loved your work. I looked forward to reading it for a long time, and I was delighted by the way it turned out. I guess I will understand if this is your last word on the Harry/Draco pairing, but I really hope you'll carry on writing HP stories.
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Date: 4/28/03 01:01 pm (UTC)I'm getting more comments (positive and negative) on Ron's characterization than on any other aspect of the story, and I think you've put your finger on why some readers aren't liking it -- he's really a fairly minor character in the story.
He isn't Harry's best friend any more; the two of them have been badly out of touch (though not for want of trying on Ron's part), and that role of "guide, humorous commentator, and reality check" has for the past five years been played by Kat rather than by Ron.
I do see more and more distance in the future of that relationship -- that's my interpretation of the canon. As long as Harry longs for Ron's family and Ron longs for Harry's importance, it's going to be increasingly difficult -- maybe ultimately impossible -- for the two of them to connect. Of course it's possible that they could deal with that openly and together, rather than just by drifting apart -- but I don't see this particular variant of Harry is being capable of doing that -- at least not at the place where he is in the early part of the story. He's not connecting with anyone.
Creating a new connection with Ron is something he could have been doing throughout the story, of course. Honestly, it didn't occur to me until I read your review that that, too, would be something he'd need to deal with if he was going to move forward. (Maybe somebody else will write that one. I had a friendship like that, and don't trust my ability to get enough distance on it to write about it.)
Thanks for the thoughtful review!
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Date: 4/27/03 02:49 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/28/03 01:03 pm (UTC)Thank You.
Date: 4/28/03 02:32 am (UTC)Still the words fail me.
This review/rec, which I posted in my journal, addresses some of what I feel. Above and beyond all else, you rock.
My dear fellow readers,
I don't know if you've heard, but there's a new piece of fiction in town.
It's called Transfigurations, by
You need to read this.
It's long (400k). It's NC-17, for explicit sex and extreme darkness.
It's 'fanfiction'.
But that doesn't mean a thing.
This is a novel in the best style of novels, taking a war's aftermath and making it into something more than a celebration. There are dark things still at Hogwarts, terrible and complex and so utterly dark that you want to go hide in your bed with all your childhood stuffed animals around you.
I was sniffling by chapter 14, full-out crying by chapter 15. It's something rare, indeed, when I cry. I can count on one hand that which will make me cry, but this story, my friends, is one of them. The gamut of emotions that you will feel while involved in this novel is huge. There are humorous points, there are lonely points, there is nostalgia and confusion and utter despair and sadness...There is the sense of hopelessness and being overpowered by the darkness in the world. And there is that glimmer of hope when you set everything right, and there is love and affection and acceptance and triumph.
This is a masterpiece of characterization. Familiar characters: Harry, Hermione, Draco, McGonagall, Ron, the Weasleys...they're all there, just as you remember them from Rowlings' work, but they've been fleshed out, given heft and depth and reality. They are confusing at times, but they are always true to character. Resonant has taken these familiar characters and enhanced them in such a natural, fluid way that it seems wrong to have them any other way. More than just fleshing them out, however, the characters have been given a dynamic nature (as of yet) not seen in the books. They undergo significant personal changes, and this is what makes them so wonderful, so appealing, so human.
It's not always easy to read, like some fan stories, even the dark ones, can tend to be. This story draws the reader in. You don't always like the characters, and there are many points in the story where their decisions just make your heart ache and your head spin, but it's worth it.
There are some things that aren't completely easy to deal with from a long-term fanfiction standpoint, such as original characters and the big Weasley family of happiness, and a new subject in school, but these are handled, for the most part, masterfully. The few rough points (I do mean few. Very few) among these simply make you appreciate the rest of the story more.
Take this story seriously. Get yourself involved with it. Lock the door, turn off the phone and the instant messenger, get rid of the pesky homework and whatever is preying on you that must be done for tomorrow. Get a nice big glass of your favorite beverage. Keep a box of Kleenex near you. Put on the best emotional music you've got (I chose the two Titanic soundtracks) if that helps you to read, or keep it quiet if you don't like music while you read.
And just read it.
This story contained such a catharsis for me that I cannot adequately express it. But I'll keep trying.
I want everyone to read this. Everyone. I don't care if you've never really gotten into Harry Potter before this, or that you don't care for slash, or that you don't have time, or whatever your excuse is. Take the time soon, clear several hours on the weekend when you would normally be watching TV, and just read it. Transfigurations (http://trickster.org/res/transfig.html), by
Ashlle (http://trickster.org/res/transfig.html)
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Date: 4/28/03 01:05 pm (UTC)You know, when I write HP, I always think I'm writing something light. The darkness in that universe always takes me by surprise, even when I see it in my own stories. (And this is true even though it would be fair to say I went overboard in giving each and every character a happy ending here.)
Where you had reservations, I'd like to hear more about them; I'm learning a lot from reader comments. My e-mail is resonant8@att.net.
i'm also bad with feedback, but..
Date: 4/28/03 08:35 am (UTC)Impressively complex. And the journey was long and hard (darktensefunnysexysweetmoving) but it all came together neatly in an optimistic, very Harry Potter ending. Absolutely enchanting story. (:
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Date: 4/28/03 01:08 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/29/03 07:01 am (UTC)And I want to see Sunday Coneskey/Scott Luniak, damn it. (g) I'm hoping many pretty please with a sweet birthday story on top will work as incentive? (g)
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Date: 4/29/03 07:42 pm (UTC)I'm thinking about Sunday -- he's very much present in my mind. Tricky to get Scott all the way over from Cascade, or to get Sunday that far west. (Unless ... I was thinking that Sunday could decide to leave the Coven to walk the Trail of Tears ... that gets him as far west as Oklahoma ...)
*pricks up ears* Did somebody say "birthday story"?
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Date: 4/29/03 09:08 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 4/29/03 07:43 pm (UTC)Transfigurations
Date: 4/29/03 10:05 am (UTC)I also liked the development of American magic, the minor mystery of Sunday (although, honestly, to my slasher's eyes, I'm surprised when any romance is m/f. :)), the brother/sister relationship between Hermione and Draco, Draco teaching Muggle studies - pretty much all of it.
And I always knew Neville had a hero inside of him.
(Minor quibble - I would have put Hermione in Transfigurations and Harry in Charms, because that seems to be their strengths in the books, but either way works, and this way was necessary for the plot.)
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Date: 4/29/03 07:46 pm (UTC)Yes, it was purely for title reasons that I put Harry in Transfiguration rather than Charms. That and the fact that I figured placing Hermione would be a breeze because she's good at everything.
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Date: 4/29/03 11:38 am (UTC)Also, I have quite the crush on your Draco ;) He's perfectly snarky and sly and exquisite and all, but you added that rippling vulnerability that's not so very well hidden if you know where to look that just...gets to me. Pocket Apollo, indeed *G*
Some of my favorite parts were the details about the American wizards. By the end, I had to pinch myself to remember that they were just a creation of yours, and no, JKR was *not* going to be giving us a filler book about them anytime soon. ::pouts:: But hey, ya know, if you ever want to write the incredible adventures of the Coven, as told by Dr. Boktor...I wouldn't stand in your way ;)
Thank you thank you thank you for writing this! I stayed up waaaay too late last night reading "just one more section" and I snuck it open on my computer at work today to finish it and now I'm so sad it's over...hmm...maybe I need to reread already...
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Date: 4/29/03 07:47 pm (UTC)Some of my favorite parts were the details about the American wizards. By the end, I had to pinch myself to remember that they were just a creation of yours, and no, JKR was *not* going to be giving us a filler book about them anytime soon. ::pouts:: But hey, ya know, if you ever want to write the incredible adventures of the Coven, as told by Dr. Boktor...I wouldn't stand in your way ;)
*grin* I might. I'd really like to see Kat and Hermione in the same room. (One of my dearest dreams is that other writers will want to play in this sandbox, too.)
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Date: 4/29/03 03:50 pm (UTC)I promise to write a better review then this short note, but since my exams aren't over, and I don't really fancy failing however good the story is, I have to go. Wonderful not-over-the-top characterization, hot sex and most importantly elaborate and well thought out plot. Wait, am I groveling? I'm groveling. :)
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Date: 4/29/03 07:48 pm (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/5/03 10:38 pm (UTC)Very well written story, and I found it really realistic - mmm, in that I could almost hear the characters voices, and see them moving around.
There's more I'd like to say, but I'm practically a zombie now and it'll just come out as mindless gushing - but great story :)
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Date: 5/13/03 11:55 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 5/31/03 06:19 pm (UTC)the visualized spells, btw, were a beautiful touch.
excellent work! thank you for putting it where people like me can run across it.
-vicki
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Date: 6/5/03 12:18 pm (UTC)And welcome to the wonderful world of slash. Hope you're finding lots of great stuff! There's an awful lot of time-wasters out there, but on the other hand, there are also stories that are better than anything you could find published on paper.
spoiler review
Date: 6/1/03 10:25 am (UTC)I'll start with the pacing. It was a very unusual decision to bring in the slash element so late in the story, and it *really* paid off. Even knowing that it was an NC17 H/D story going in I was still surprised by their first sex scene. For a while I even thought (like Harry) that you were going Draco/Hermione, and Draco's coming out took me by surprise. (Although Sunday's gender didn't - as a slashfreak, I was paying careful attention to the pronouns or lack of them.) By developing the characters and their relationship as slowly as you did, you allowed for an unusually satisfying payoff.
Draco. Wow. One of the best takes on him I've ever seen. He's still snarky and mean and rude and selfish and ambitious and vain...but along the way he seems to have gained real wisdom, which is a very hard thing to write. A favorite moment - when he talks about leaving the Death Eaters, not because they were evil, and not even out of love for his friends, but because they were pathetic. Like he's really seen how small and just plain uninteresting the dark side is.
Harry. I like very much his limitations here, and how he gradually grows to accept them. I guess this was harder for him than it was for Draco, because Draco had the advantage of having his limitations clear all along. Harry could imagine himself perfect or capable of doing every good and brave thing, and then be shocked when he wasn't. I just love his constant denial throughout the story until the end. Although even at the very end he needs Draco to explain things to him.
The one part that was hard for me to understand was the memorial sequence - why Harry needed to build that monument, and why that in partucular was what could help him come to terms with himself. Well, maybe I'll see it more next read.
Other things I liked: The way they never say 'I love you' to each other. Draco's full name, and the way Harry says it. Draco without magic, and all the things he can't do, right up to taking off his ridiculous clothes. Draco spelling off clothes at just the right moment. Draco with the ghost-cat in his lap. 'Sometimes you need a spell and a butter-knife.' The way spell-design seems to work like computer programming. 'Everything important leaves a mark somewhere.' That mechanical pencil. Bookworm house. Snape wanting to keep the dark mark, so someone should be left with one. Sunday's basket-weaving, and all the background about American magic. The new headmaster, and how he was chosen. Beautiful, beautiful sex scenes, that are so different from the beginning to the end of the story.
As long as it was, I still wish there were more. I've bookmarked your site, and I'll be back to read other things.
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Date: 6/5/03 12:15 pm (UTC)Although Sunday's gender didn't - as a slashfreak, I was paying careful attention to the pronouns or lack of them.
Hee! I wondered whether anybody was surprised by Sunday being a boy. In my first draft he was a girl -- who existed only because it seemed likely that Harry would have gotten involved with somebody in the five years since the war -- but Julad suggested that I change him.
He's still snarky and mean and rude and selfish and ambitious and vain..
I'm glad all that came through. I wanted him good enough to love, but not too good to be true.
The one part that was hard for me to understand was the memorial sequence - why Harry needed to build that monument, and why that in partucular was what could help him come to terms with himself.
More than anything, I think Harry just needed to look his grief in the face, and to realize that it was not in his power to save them. He could have done that in any number of ways, but that one seemed right, intuitively.
As long as it was, I still wish there were more.
I keep hoping someone else will want to play in that universe.
Thanks for your great comments!
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Date: 8/2/07 04:08 am (UTC)(no subject)
Date: 8/9/07 02:31 am (UTC)Thanks for leaving a comment -- in spite of how long it took me to respond, it really did make my day.