New SGA story: Experiment

[resonant]

Experiment
McKay/Sheppard -- NC-17 -- 16K
Rodney likes variety.

For kormantic, in exchange for two lovely Rodney icons.

Many, many beta thanks to astolat, cesperanza, liviapenn, and terrio, who spent hours fine-tuning the smut to make it prettier.

Comments

[celli]

I--with the--and the--lab expression! *makes wild hand gestures*

I have to go lie down now.

*thud*

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Hee! If Rodney turned his full brain power on John, it'd be a miracle if John survived.

[norah.livejournal.com]

Oh, and it WAS pretty. Very pretty. Thank you! That hit whoa many of my buttons in a delightfully unique way. I loved the bit where Rodney tells John that of course John's not disappointed with his mind. "Crisply." Lovely.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

I almost knocked that 'crisply' out in my usual adverb-reduction edit, but I was too attached to it.

[unlovablehands.livejournal.com]

Whoa, dude. That was hot. Also, sweet. Aww. *Notes that apparently avoiding writing papers makes me give feedback. Hmmmm.*

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Nothing's impossible if you're procrastinating something worse, I always say.

[grey-bard.livejournal.com]

Guh. So hot! Obviously sex with obsessive brilliant people is foolishly underrated. I mean, if Rodney gets obsessive about sunscreen why wouldn't he put at least that much brain power into sex? I love it!

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

To have Rodney tackle you the way he tackles a problem -- I'm not sure whether it would be hot or scary.

[mandragora1.livejournal.com]

Whew. That was-- Er, yes. But it was also very touching, the depth of feeling between the two men and how much Rodney wanted to make John happy and how affected John was when he realised that. That was just lovely.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad all that stuff came through!

if anyone COULD it's Rodney, no QUESTION

[iamsab.livejournal.com]

OH. MYGOD. You made Rodney somehow even hotter. From now on I plan to believe everything you say, about everything, in the whole world.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

I vow to use my power only for good.

[svmadelyn.livejournal.com]

I--just--*hitches*. I think I was holding my breath for a few seconds there. So good.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad!

[runpunkrun]

Oooh, Rodney lies around thinking of things to do to John. That's so hot. Kormantic is a lucky girl.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

When I imagined Rodney doing that, I had to stop and close my eyes for a bit.

[neery.livejournal.com]

Oh God. Guh. This is... so, so perfect. So hot, and there's just so much feeling in so few words, especially at the end. Just the thought of Rodney laying awake at night, thinking up new ways to make John feel good...

I am probably reading way too much into this, but in the backstory to this that lives in my head, Rodney is kind of afraid that John is going to get bored with him and move on, so he tries to keep John's interest awake by, well, being creative and the best lover John's ever had. (Also, it turs him on like crazy, of course.) And maybe he isn't quite as secure about these things as he pretends he is, and he quietly freaks out a lot, afraid that maybe this time John isn't going to like it, or that he'll go too far or something...

Anyway, I love this story like I can't even say. It took me twice as long to read it, because I read pretty much every paragraph twice, just enjoying your amazing way with words. There were so many incredibly hot images that will never ever leave my mind again - John sitting with his cock showing through his boxers, and Rodney counting while John is getting himself off, and... you've possibly give me a complete new set of kinks, here.

[svmadelyn.livejournal.com]

I am probably reading way too much into this, but in the backstory to this that lives in my head, Rodney is kind of afraid that John is going to get bored with him and move on, so he tries to keep John's interest awake by, well, being creative and the best lover John's ever had. (Also, it turs him on like crazy, of course.) And maybe he isn't quite as secure about these things as he pretends he is, and he quietly freaks out a lot, afraid that maybe this time John isn't going to like it, or that he'll go too far or something...

*grins* I just wanted to chime in and say that's pretty much exactly how I read it too. God. Yaaaayyy Resonant. :D

[chopchica.livejournal.com]

You know, each time I think your writing has reached the pinnacle of hotness, you prove me so, so wrong.

And yet, with all of that omgsohotness, the fact that it's kissing Rodney that makes John come is just so *perfect*.

It's always such a thrill when you post a new story. In my fantasy reading world, I'll wake up one morning and you'll have posted a gigantic story and I will be SO HAPPY!

Of course, I'm pretty happy right now anyway :)

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Way to make my ego match Rodney's, there. Glad you liked it!

[ship-recs.livejournal.com]

Guh. That's so hot. And sweet.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Glad you liked it.

Ooh, and such a nice icon.

[stellahobbit.livejournal.com]

Oh my. Hot and sweet. Just the way I like them.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Me too. Glad you liked!

[birdsflying]

:flails:

Hot, clever and Rodney is so fiendishly evil in a great way. Fantastic!

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Thanks! Glad you liked it.

[trinityofone.livejournal.com]

Oh, God, I love this. Rodney the savant of sex. (!!!) He's so scientific about it, and it should be cold, but the way you write it, it's anything but. Eeee.

[villeinage.livejournal.com]

Okay, this one absolutely wins the prize for density of characterization per incidence of smut.

There is a prize for that, right?

Seriously, the fanreader in me wants to goldleaf every sentence in this story, or at least, work it up into a mandatory powerpoint presentation for every newbie aspiring smut writer, and then grab my LaserPointer of Doom:

Here! See this sentence which subtly reveals the inner vulnerability/motivation of the character, creates something new in the relationship, and happens to occur while (screamingly hot) sex is going on? That's what you should be aiming for in your writing!

Alas, I can only send feedback.

Love this story like my best beloved.

[wychwood]

I think that one gets a big "guh" from me...

I like the attention Rodney puts into it all, the focus he has. Very cool :) I love the way he got all defensive, especially.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. Rodney probably thinks he's hot, but he thinks so for all the wrong reasons.

[yarngeek.livejournal.com]

This was a beautiful, porny thing to wake up to. I am gleeful.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Thanks! I'm so glad.

[myalexandria.livejournal.com]

wow. I, yes, thoroughly enjoyed that. In fact, it made my stomach do that thing. But it was also a set of two heartbreakingly fabulous characterizations, revealed *through* porn, which is the hardest thing to do. Awesome.

My favorite parts: (1) that it turns John on that it turns Rodney on to see him, at the beginning; (2) that Rodney lies around thinking about things to do to him, uhuh, that's what I'm talking about; (3) that John is so helpless in the face of Rodney's focus and so happy about it.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad! Thanks. You mentioned some of my favorite stuff, too, so clearly you are a reader of taste and discretion.

[myalexandria.livejournal.com]

oh, also? rearranging John. Rodney the artist, nudging things into perfection. :)

[inthekeyofd.livejournal.com]

OMFG. I can't even..okay, I need a moment here, damn, literally my brain has gone so off course I can barely type.

Just OMG, is about all the coherent feedback I can muster right now.

Damn!!! You are just too good!!

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Hee -- glad you liked it!

[spikedluv]

Love the idea of Rodney thinking up these things just for John. Experiments are good. *g*

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Definitely.

I'd love to know some of his outtakes, actually -- the stuff he thought about and then went, "Nah, never work."

[shayheyred.livejournal.com]

Um...::wipes brow:: ....yeah. Oh, yeah.
Jeepers. Do you lie around thinking of things to do to us?

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

You know I do.

[dogeared.livejournal.com]

Scientific inquiry dedicated to the improvement of John & Rodney's sex life is hot.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Yeah, they're lucky, aren't they?

[wickedwords.livejournal.com]

I love the way Rodney's mind works in this, and how he lies awake at night, thinking of things to do with John. that is just so Rodney to me. Not to mention the hot

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Good! Glad he seemed like himeslf.

[minnow1212.livejournal.com]

:fans self:

I love how they're each trying to please each other, how you can tell, with John more obviously but with Rodney too, how neither of them quite understands how much the other is into them. Aside from the hot, it was the clumsy heartfelt kisses that got to me.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Aww -- that's my favorite thing, too. Glad it came across.

[brownbetty]

Guh! And the little touch of insecurity just makes it... guh.

[resonant8.livejournal.com]

Good! Does that to me, too.